It used to tick me off that people would not take the time to go through the pitches and leave constructive comments. I believe I even blogged about it once or twice(probably before most of you currently on the site's time). For me this was to be a place where I could get, and give, feedback on creative works, because I believe actively engaging in creativity promotes creativity in ones self.
 But now I find I have become one of those guilty of not looking at pitches/galleries. I come to the site(far less often than I used to) and by  the time I read some blogs, and maybe make a comment or two, I am done. Originally I had reduced the amount of time looking at others' works to allow myself more time to work on my own stuff(my spare time and energy is very limited as I am sure many have heard me whine before), but lately I have been spending less time on my writing and such, and more time watching TV. I was finding myself less interested(Mr.Man) in writing down any stories I may be daydreaming about(Mr. Puffy). Maybe all this is related to my not paying attention to pitches, and creative interaction with  those creators. For this I apologize.
I make no promises(for my spare time is truly limited), but in a selfish effort to kickstart my own creativity again, if you have a piece you would like a laman's opinion on, drop me a link and I will see if I can offer up one( for the linkly challenged, just give me the title).

PS-hope you are not in a rush for that feedback

Some time back I promised I would review one pitch per week here on the blogs.  That was about six weeks ago now and I believe I have done two.  Pretty pathetic.  I don't know if I will be able to do better, but I am here to at least add one more.
The State of Jorgia (link someone, please) is the latest effort from MightyGeko, the author of Stan's Last Deal and it is futuristic post apocalyptic story about a brother and sister who are trying to get somewhere.
Crackwalker was talking a bit about this story earlier today and I have to say I agree with my fellow green guy, though first let me tell you what I like about the pitch.
Despite his penchant for typos, geko does a real nice job of describing scenes.  While you are reading the script in the pitch doctor you can practically visualize each panel.  Plenty of good, vivid rich detail.  And the dialogue is pretty tight for the most part.  He also slowly pulls back the curtain to let the reader in on a few more facts about what is happening here, while still leaving plenty of mystery for you to wonder about.
Now here is what I didn't like about it: First, the name Jorgia.  I don't know why but it bothers me.  It's a tiny point but to me if you are going to use the name spell it correctly and don't pull your reader out of the story every time they see it.
Second: no character descriptions.  They don't need to be more than a couple of lines but I usually find a small description here helpful.
Third: Like Crackwalker says, it is too slow and takes too long to get going.  Right now there are fifteen pages and really the story hasn't hardly moved at all.  Despite the fact they are in an obviously troubled city there is little palpable sense of danger, no feeling for what they are going through, and few clues about how they or anyone else are surviving and dealing with this holocaust.
Now I have no doubt geko knows the answer to these things, and I know he doesn't want to spill all the beans at once.  This is fine.  But put something in to make the reader want to keep turning the page for goodness sake!  The first page is good, I thought, but from there it just bogs down and goes nowhere.
Okay, Mr. Man, that was one man's opinion, and only that.  The real important thing is - What do all of you think????

Hi guys. I'm been a little busy with my other stuff at DeviantART, but I've got a new pitch for you.

Gunn for Hire is a Hong Kong-inspired (mostly by John Woo's "Heroic Bloodshed" genre) action thriller set in New York City which chronicles disgraced ex-cop Quentin Gunn and his crew in his troubleshooting agency, which their gun shop is a front, facing a criminal anarchist mastermind named Big Smiley, who is determined to put the city into total chaos.

I hope you like this new pitch. And I welcome your feedback.

Gunn for Hire Z2H pitch

I've got a new pitch posted.  It's a story called "The Drink".  You can check it out here.

Here's the synopsis:

Monkey is one of the best in the killing business.  He's got a quick mouth and an even quicker gun.  When he's sent after another of the best in the business, Babydoll, he's in for a global game of cat and mouse.

Maybe it's the chase, or maybe it's the picture of Babydoll that he keeps in his pocket at all times, but whatever the reason Monkey is discovering feelings he thought he killed long ago.  Leave it to a bombshell of a brunette with a penchant for his own line of work and enough skill to shame a village of Bruce Lee wannabes to bring out the softy in an otherwise hardened hitman.

Throw in gun fights, explosions, rock bands, car chases, Russian mobsters, military helicopters, kung fu, and an ending that you sure as hell didn't see coming and you've got a two issue story that I call "The Drink."

hope you like it!

Hey, folks.  It's me again, the voice in your ear from beyond the...well, I'm actually in your kitchen, eating your beans.  Don't offer to heat them up, I like 'em this way.

So convention season wound down middle of last month, but life's little stresses have kept me busyish and my creativity low.  I started working on web programming a couple of weeks ago, and I have a prototypical show out--if you're interested, it's up at needsfoodbadly.blip.tv, and there's more to come in the future.

In that, I've not done nearly as much work on my comic scripts as I'd like to have, but I'll cop to being low on ideas. The revision of The Ashen Man didn't seem to go as well as I'd expected, and I may have to step away from that for a while and focus on other endeavours.

Other than that, life continues.  I like the weather around here right now, and stresses in life notwithstanding, life is good, and I'm not looking to change a thing.

Onwards!  Excelsior!  Bourbon on the rocks!

Just checking in with all you crazy kids and not-kids.  It's been busy on the old homestead, but I've been cycling through some ideas, and I think we're going ahead.

The Ashen Man was a fun trip, and I'm hoping to have some new pages in Eastbound before too long passes--I like the idea there, and I think with some touches, well, it could be awesome.

Did I miss much?  I haven't really read the blogs in...months...and I'm sure I missed some good pitches here and again.  Mea culpa, please don't hurt me!

Oh well.  Back to working for mah dollahs.  Holler back?  Okay.  Or just say hi, that's just as good!

I'm currently working on a joint project between me and my fellow colleague at DeviantART.com and I thought I would share the pitch with the rest of you Z2H members.

Mechanical Battle Avatar Angel Arms

Hope you enjoy and hope for your feedback.

What it is, my peeps?  ...that sounded about as authentic as american cheese, and every bit as tasteless.

Just a quick one: the first four pages of the third Eastbound story, "Tending Cold Embers", are up for your evaluation!

Heyo!  I'm not dead yet!

Just a quickie: I'm working on a new story for Eastbound that I think has just enough razzle to it that you'll like it, a re-write of The Ashen Man: Dances from a completely different angle that maaaay just flow better, and a new piece I call To The Last Man, documenting the last days of the Unliving-Living Wars.  But don't think they're your standard zeds...I'm avoiding the Romero/28 Days stereotypes as hard as I can!

Talk at you...hopefully more often than I have been!

I'll be uploading the first few scripts to Prophets to the pitch as I update them, and I command you to check them out. Especially if you are an artist interested in what is at least in my head a relatively large project.

Ok...that sounds like a major bragging line. The mother of all pitches, but what I mean is, of all my pitches The Mother is the most recently updated. For those who have checked it out in the past, I hope you can find some time to take a look at the rest of the script for book 1 and let me know what you think. It is rough and needs formatting so at this time I am looking for more general opinions if the story is still working for you or if you feel I have gone astray kind of stuff.
If you haven't checked it out before here is the synopsis. If you're interested give it a look and let me know what you think.
For centuries humankind has been adapting their environment to suit their needs. What if the environment didn’t like that?  What if the earth had a spiritual council of elementals that worked to control the balance? What if this council viewed humankind as a blight that was threatening to tip the scale beyond any hope of recovery?  What if this council was able to manifest warriors to rebalance the scale before it is too late? What if the rise of these warriors could spell the apocalypse for humankind on earth? What if all that the council was waiting for was…



…The Mother…



…Hailey Carlton was a free spirited 24 year old, just finishing her degree in Environmental Biology. While hiking with her fiance ?Scott Peterson, in the mountains she mysteriously disappeared. Two weeks later she was discovered wandering around the woods with no memory of what had happened to her. Another odd thing was that she appeared to be pregnant, very pregnant. Baffled by the disappearance, the amnesia, and the mysterious pregnancy she finds it difficult to get back into her “regular” life. She is plagued by strange nightmares and she is continually experiencing moments of blackout, where she will suddenly be somewhere or doing something and not be able to recall how she got there or what she was doing. Concerned for her well being, her family has her hospitalized until the babies are born. In the institute Hailey gives birth to four beautiful children. When the children begin to exhibit anomalous growth and strange behavior they are taken from Hailey so that they may be tested. This sends Hailey into a rage. A rage that is amplified by the manifestation of special abilities.

Hey!  Didja miss me?  Guess what?  You're gonna keep missing me.

My employer's come down with a sledgehammer on "personal browsing" during hours, so Z2H is right out.  Sadly, the daytime's when all my inspiration tends to strike, and given my nights are both short and busy, I'm not sure when I'm going to have time to work on scripts much more.  (This is sci-fi convention season, so I'm exceedingly busy coordinating things...)

I have more scripts for Eastbound lined up, but I might actually abandon Cherry Lips for a while; it was always built as a movie script, and I'm not sure it makes the transition well to comic form.

...and I'm considering forgetting about The Ashen Man for good.  *sigh*

G'day, y'all!  I'm not dead.  Not yet anyways, and you there, put down that knife!

The goal today was to write a single page for a new script I've been bandying about in my head, Eastbound, which is not particularly my standard over-the-top plot work.  I also tried to go without character designs in advance, instead letting things sort of brew themselves--with the exception of the first two pages, none of this was planned out in advance.

I managed to scribble up thirteen pages.  It's not a complete script, and it'll probably end up as one story in a two story comic, since these sort of things work much better as short form than as twenty-plus-page longer stories.  At least for me.

So for those watching, the pitch is available if you click one of these words right here.  Enjoy, comment, and hang loose.

Well, I actually did something after all!  I guess I have a little motivation after all...

The first two pages of Cherry Lips! are posted; enjoy, read through; there's more behind it, I just need to work it on out.

As well, Killer Of Men and Jet are back in the private side; the latter needs much much more thought before it can go forward, and the former is getting out of hand--the next few pages would have Richard killing Elise's daughter animalistically, and I'm not sure that's where I should take the reader; while I can write it, is it something that'll be read?  Always the question.