Yojimbo
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The 47 Ronin
Action / Western The path to redemption leads to your own heart... Yojimbo Created: April 27th, 2008 Views: 36 Comments: 6 Collectors: 3 |
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Tenzil Kem July 22nd 2008 2:56am
Hey, Yojimbo! How are you? It's been a while! I'm only writing today because Z2H is having a little contest called Direct to Development which finishes this week on Friday. There are only six pitches available and every vote counts! How about it? Do you have time to look at six pitches and cast some votes? If not, don't worry about it! Later, dude!
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Tenzil Kem April 26th 2008 2:08am
Hey, glad to see you like Orson Scott Card too! I have loved everything I've ever read that he's done. Don't worry about what you say when critiquing my stories. I've been in writing classes for years and I know what to take and what to leave. Thanks for the continuing support. All the best to you,
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Tenzil Kem April 25th 2008 12:14pm
Thanks again Yojimbo. Your remarks are excellent and insightful. I will definitely take into account everything you said as I move the story forward! Take care my friend!
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Titan.inc April 25th 2008 6:16am
I mention it in the character bio, but for Cyber Defcon Mo is largely dealing with returning home without much fanfare (humans weren't truly the "war-heroes" of the war as the machines were the ones who ended it), dealing with his ex-wife who sees him as different and which was part of the divorce, and his 11 year old daughter who he hasn't seen much, if at all, in the last 7 years leading up to the end of the war. Meanwhile, he's also trying to run this organization and everything else.
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Titan.inc April 25th 2008 6:13am
Thanks for stopping by! :D Good comments. I'll have to look over it this weekend and make some changes. So I'm guessing you are suggesting I emphasize the subplot between Mo and his ex-wife who sees him as this different, changed man and whatnot included in the actual synopsis? Indeed, Equilibrium have that nice little extra touch.
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Tenzil Kem April 23rd 2008 1:25am
Yo, Yojimbo. Thanks for the comments on Rolling Thunder. I agree with much of what you said in your remarks. There will be other people encountered, etc. but mainly it's the two of them on their own against the elements and environment. The story itself will feature more character development and events that occur to make them aware of their feelings and to make those feelings grow. Thanks for sharing and keep watching this story grow!
